THIRD FRIDAY WRITING NEWS 19 Sep 2014

Welcome to our third Friday writing news. Every third Friday I'm going to invite you into my writing world. Share some tidbits with you, and update you on the progress of the VALLEY VIEW series.

This week, we'll start with SAMANTHA.

Don't you just love the cover? This week, I have the back Cover blurb to share with you.



At seventeen, con man Louis Cantrell left Samantha Evans broke and pregnant. But, she’s persevered. Four years later, while raising her daughter, Samantha pursues her dream of becoming a child welfare social worker. Her life is on track, and if God answers her prayers, one day she’ll marry Patrick Wheeler, the handsome law student she accidentally ran over in a parking lot. All that keeps them apart is Patrick’s refusal to accept Christ in his life, but they’re working on that.
Patrick Wheeler loves Samantha—and her little girl—but he’s done with Christ. Raised in church, Patrick witnessed first-hand how God does not answer prayers. First, his father dies at war…despite the plethora of prayers for safety. Then his stepfather dies within a year of marrying his mother. And as faithful as Samantha is, God allowed her to be taken advantage of. Yet, even when Louis returns to do more damage, she still insists she won’t marry Patrick unless he dedicates his life to Christ!

When Samantha chooses a con man and God over Patrick, he decides it’s time to leave. . .Or is it? After a surprising confrontation with God, Patrick experiences for the first time how it feels to be completely alone. What is he missing about this Christianity thing everyone else seems to see so clearly? Can he reconcile with God and Samantha before all is lost?

Curious?  Samantha's story will be out in the spring of 2015.

Let's move on to Kate's story.


This is not Kate's cover, just her picture that I clipped from Pam's cover.  

I have a short excerpt and a question.

 

All units, we have a silent alarm at 231 South Main.
Nicolas glanced at Tyler as his partner bolted upright in his seat and jammed the key into the ignition. Tire smoke billowed behind the car as Tyler shoved the gearshift into drive and pulled a sharp U turn in front of the high school. He stood on the gas, steering the vehicle back toward town.
Nicolas found himself forced back into the seat by what could only be described as the launch of the car. “What are you…?”
“That’s the address for the bakery.” The car fishtailed, tires searching for purchase in the gravel as they left the service road for the main road into town.
High speed responses were rare in Garfield, usually the result of accident, not threat. Nicolas braced himself, hand planted on the dash, back burrowed into his seat as Tyler careened into the oncoming lane to dodge a slower vehicle. He’d never seen Tyler in action. He was both impressed and terrified. “Tyler, slow down. Killing us before we get there won’t help Melanie. They said silent alarm. If you go there hot, you’re likely to spook someone.”
“And if I take my time, Melanie might get hurt. Damned if I do, damned if I don’t.”

 "Damned if I do, damned if I don't."
Used in this context I don't consider this swearing, just a statement of the impossibilities of the situation. My editor didn't have an issue with it either, but she prefers that I change it lest it offend some of my readers.
Here's my question. Do you feel this inappropriate for a Christian novel? How would you rewrite the line? 





 

1 comment:

  1. Wrong if I do, Wrong if I don't. (maybe) Lots of people say it is ok to say oh GOD because they aren't cussing, But the preacher said it is using GOD's name in vain. Me, I've never felt the need to say it unless I'm talking to GOD or talking about HIM. Maxie

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